英文作文技巧:如何使文章寫得更生動?

December 19, 2017

替學生英文補習多年,我留意到不少學生的作文內容欠生動是源於他們不懂運用show but not tell這個作文技巧。 


Show but not tell 是指運用「多感觀描寫」以顯示某景物/人物/事物一種狀態。簡單一點說,如果你寫He was very angry,這是直接告訴讀者他很生氣。想文章寫得生動有趣,你可以從幾方面描寫,當一個人生氣時,他的面部表情會怎樣?聲線有甚麼不同?會有甚麼動作和想法?

 

您應該寫成:

 

1. His face became as red as a tomato. He clenched his fists into tight balls, stormed out of the classroom and slammed the door. 

 

他的臉紅得像蕃茄,他的手緊握拳頭,衝出課室,大力關門。

 

除此之外,您還可以用

yelled at Mary loudly  / became a fire-breathing dragon / stomped up the stairs / glared at Mary / pursed his lips together tightly 

 

 

想令句子更生動,可以用副詞(adverbs), 明喻(simile), hyperbole (誇張手法), 形容詞(adjectives), 暗喻(metaphor)

 

 

再看多些例子: 

 

Example 1 

 

Tell: She was very sad. 

 

Show:  Her eyes were red. Tears kept flowing down from her eyes.  Her lips trembled and she said in a shaky, low voice, 'My puppy died this morning. ' 

 

 

Example 2

 

Tell: My room was very messy. 

 

Show: I walked into my crowded room and clothes were thrown everywhere. The sheets were crumpled up in a pile on my unmade bed. My books, pens and folders were scattered on the rug. A smell of rotten eggs came from my dirty socks. 

 

Example 3

 

Tell: My mum was very worried about my grandma. 

 

Show: My mum kept pacing back and forth, waiting for the call from the hospital.  She couldn't stop herself from looking at her mobile phone. 

 

Example 4

 

Tell: The pizza was delicious.

 

Show: Steam rising up off the melted cheese made my mouth water. The first bite, my teeth sinking into the cheese through the moist crust and into the tomato sauce , made me chew and swallow quickly. 

 

 

更多有用句式:

http://natstuart18.wordpress.com/2014/02/18/show-dont-tell/

 

 

更多相關文章:

 

1. 作文技巧:作文只會用First/ Next/ Then/ After that/ Finally?

    這篇文章教您如何活用Adverbs of time

https://www.fchanengclass.com/single-post/adverbs-of-time

 

2. 如何使文章寫得更生動?

http://bit.ly/2ze8oSf

 

 

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